I met her at a club dinner one Saturday night. There was an odd sort of radiance on her countenance. I was helping myself to a fifth glass of chilled lemonade when I spotted her. She was standing alone—though not in a corner. I walked up to her out of sheer curiosity. Something magnetic about her seemed to be drawing me towards her—irresistibly, inevitably… Hesitating slightly, I sauntered casually up to where she stood. ‘Don’t you think the music’s playing a bit too loud’ I asked casually. ‘Uh…yeah, well sort of’ she replied somewhat warily. ‘So, enjoying yourself?’ I asked. ‘Yeah’ she said without enthusiasm. ‘Don’t sound like it’ I remarked. ‘Well,’ she said more freely, ‘I thought I’d meet some friends at least. But my luck seems to have run out.’ She sighed. I looked up and nearly gasped. For the first time I noticed how pretty she was. Fringes of hair ran down her face, and as she pushed them back I noticed her eyes—sparkling black—she looked bewitching. ‘Oh well…yeah it’s that w...
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Excellent prose..
Its so neatly wrapped up. Delightful! Expecially at 18... All the best for the road ahead!
~anon
(clicked on one of the links at apple pathways)
as for spilled to bloodlessness, i don't have the say so on that site to invite you on. i used to but the owner of the site took me off. have a word with enemy of the republic. see if she will ask you on.
cj >> thanks for the comment and the info
Now THAT I'd like to see in slow motion. ^_^
Hullo, dear. Thank you for the visit to and comment on my site. I see yours has a new name, Diaporesis.
Do write more. Cheers.
thanks for looking in on me
cheers
thank you for your visit and you are welcome to come back any time :)
Thank you for your visit. Hope to see you around here often.
Long time since I saw you here. Hope you are good. Thank you for your comment. See you around here often.
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Thank you. I will visit again soon.
We are all learners here. :-)
Sue
Thanks for visiting. Great to have you back and blogging.
P.S. Diaporesis means uncertain.
I like your choice of words here. Vivid imagery and strong emotions well up inside me when I read this.
"steep stairs of thought"
"Like mercury on moist leaves"
tht ending gets me, too
thank you. :)
Thx for visiting...keep hopping by and so will I!